So for dVerse today I figured I'd stretch my skills with this display. Of course I found one I liked and kinda copied the rhyme scheme, which I'm sure through it a familar poet will beam. But anyway, just going to show it doesn't always have to be end rhyme at my bay. And it let me stretch my skill. Now come and get your fill.
Flashback
Once upon a frightful quest, while I lingered for a rest,
Surrounded by awe shimmering shadows of blood black,
While they frolicked, nearly running, broiled in their simple cunning,
A blinding flash was rather stunning, stunning from my pack.
"Damn bind," I grumbled, "Loose again in my pack,
Which I carry on my back."
I muttered over the sales call I received at the mall,
For it I could recall while reaching round for a smack.
Stuck in perpetual lazy my eyes were quickly growing hazy,
What appeared seemed crazy - crazy as a heart attack.
Fact which pawned upon morrows night attack,
Scar forever on my back.
The size remained insisting having crazy still persisting,
Enamored of the stature progressing like sea wrack
Grasped in nerve sensation I found a slight elation,
"Bless the flash mutation stunning from my pack"
"Fame brought by mutation stunning from my pack;"
Solely resting on my back.
My mind spun rehearsal; fear retreating into reversal,
"Stay," ordered I, "excuse my lack of special knack.
Simply your incessant running targets very little cunning.
The added flash was stunning, stunning from my pack.
That my eyes deceived me." Allowance of the pack.
Swinging loose on my back.
Looking within the tattered confines, creeping loose awakened signs,
Attracting signs which resemble designated quack.
Yet the creeping came returning, increasing my fame's yearning,
Slowly I was learning the grievance given to my pack.
Counting my expected earning, paving waves to my pack,
Which started on my back.
Could exhaustion harbor tricks as my mind tumbled bricks?
For emerging shadows computed neglect track.
"Has to," said I, "My ship has docked from this spy.
Let me dispute dry growing mystery to detour flack.
Confine my mind for a moment to detour flack;
Slumping crazy on my back.
Closing stunning sack I slung, back to back deterring bell rung.
In the darkness I crept through nerves attack.
There before my peering eyes, stayed more glowing eyes.
A thief's quartet meandering lies, bestowed from my pack.
Bestowed upon thieving dreams exaggerated from my pack,
Lingering forth on my back.
There some ranks kept staffing echoing incessant laughing,
Apparitions held more yield than such piercing clack,
"Your tact is rather inspiring," I said, "fact I'm left admiring,
But patience is expiring wishing for your fade to black.
Provide one reason to sway your fade to infinite black."
Breezing wind spoke, "Flashback."
Surround to increased judging, unclear to their breezed nudging,
Exploring memories just created - mesmerized before slipped crack.
Peering eyes were unceasing in the dark they were policing,
Which I was leasing from my restful pack,
Ordain or lore spotted from my restful pack,
Subtly advising, "Flashback."
The collection remained defiant in face of the parading giant,
Lonely yet masked as one endearing pack.
Striking and ready to rumble while distingushed in humble,
Forcing my returning mumble, "Preperation for a whack,
Passage given to prevent preperation for a whack."
I was simply given, "Flashback."
Accomplishing what was desired, the rest I had required,
Furnaced by rising fire arrowed to my track,
Sharpened to my surprise proving their thief disguise,
Still breezing forth their cries of narrowing flack,
Hope was all that lingered in such narrowing flack,
With the utterance of, "Flashback."
Brightened eyes and bestowed pride, razored upon my stride,
Straight I charted within my mind to little moving slack.
Suddenly my hope was sinking when upon me they came slinking,
Jailed to the sight of blinking, shining forth Olympic plaque,
Sunk in slink, sharpen, scrouge, scavenging of Olympic plaque,
Lies encompassing, "Flashback."
Sicken from whistling whining, in need of some dining,
Flipped forth the envious sack beseeching a snack,
Staring eyes all a flutter, slick as day old dripping butter,
Forcing forth a tainted stutter, "Flash within my pack,
Dwindling declarations hung wasting within my pack,
Whispering forth, "Flashback."
Lording over dropping straps wishing for darkened gaps,
Filtering through the natures nurturing hack,
Forest flirting with the zipper, surrounding foes becoming chipper,
Crawling cackles directing pointed flipper, gunning the track,
Zoning deeper into games gunning for the track,
Lingering echoes store, "Flashback."
Once upon a frightful quest while I lingered for a rest,
Thieving shadows whispered in unison from the black,
Lurking desperate for my riding, truimphant in their guiding,
Ridding me of past siding, through lights dancing cracks,
Paven path's golden fleece back in lights dancing cracks,
My refusal to, "Flashback."
There we go, I'll let each draw their own conclusion at my show. For whatever it is about each can look and find their own singing trout. That just rhymed and was well timed, no singing trout near it and so ends this dVerse hit. Tomorrow I will be more crass and once more my usual little rhyming ass.
Fill your rummer, get drunk all summer.
I see what you've done here Pat and it's actually incredible, is there anything you can't rhyme?
ReplyDeleteLove how you managed to rhyme so many words ending with ack, that takes some real talent and I won't take that back. Anyone who comes to Pat to attack will find their rhyming surely lacks.
I'm now getting carried away although I shall return to comment another day.
The cat you will never stop
DeleteAnd one cannot top
He can rhyme any scheme given
As long as he's livin'
All the ack came due
Thankfully there are a lot of them to view
wow dude you got it all in your hall today, some wicked imagery and pervasive rhyme, clearing your throat with all the ack ack...some fav lines...Brightened eyes and bestowed pride, razored upon my stride,
ReplyDeleteStraight I charted within my mind to little moving slack...ha...i think i know who you went after, but getting it wrong it could be disaster, so being fred out of bed, my first thought was fred
Went a different route today
DeleteJust to mix it up at my bay
Was interesting to do
And that's what was thought by you
Hmmm well you never know
Maybe subliminal that's where I decided to go
Incessant use of 'Flashbacks'
ReplyDeleteMay run through lots of smacks
Provoking the many smart alecks
Scampering them with potent flacks
Tell them to 'cool it Mac'
They are rightly packed
If they want one back
Hank
Using all the end rhymes
DeleteThat broguth forth my chimes
What fun times
Beats the nasty mimes
And if they want one back
They better go on the attack
Whew, my pea brain can't keep up with the sophisticated likes of you. You certainly never disappoint.
ReplyDeletehaha a sophisticated cat
DeleteWho would have thought that
Crazy I will go back too
As that is easier to do haha
Good to try something new
ReplyDeletestirs up the mind and one's audience too
nice rhymes today that followed good form
something delightfully out of the norm!
Yeah have to give the mind a run
DeleteFrom my usual fun
Once in a while
Just to let loose a new style
Could this be about the pain
ReplyDeleteyour body has gained,
and a quest to find out why
it won't leave you high and dry?
Thinking back in time
what could have rung this chime?
Seems to be a burden strapped...
a backpack of pain upon your back.
And the mystery goes on
as it taunts you dusk til dawn.
Hmm I suppose
DeleteIt could be my woes
More in a subliminal state
But yeah such a crap fate
One of these days it will go away
At least I hope at my bay
Friggin food stirred it up though
That I for sure now know
Just have to get back to the norm
Then should be back to form
Well, even if my guess was wrong
Deleteit is a brilliant poem or song
I love this side of your creativity
more than the poo and it's immaturity.
lol.....
Second guess is bad memories of the past
Deletethat still haunt you wide and vast
sometimes making it hard to sleep
and flashbacks fill your dreams.
hahaha yeah immaturity does come through
DeleteBut less of the use of poo
Will be used at my sea
As that rut has been kicked by me
Although one pringle can one will come
I couldn't pass it up by my little rhyming bum haha
No bad memories haunt me
I let them go with glee
Move on and forget the crap
Leads to a much better nap
Especailly with a new bed
To rest my and Cassie's head
Then I give up
DeleteI'm out of luck!
Had to move to plastic shopping bags here
a pringle's can won't hold it all, I fear.
lol....
LMAO but with three boys chowing down
DeleteDon't you have enough cans at your town?
Shopping bags are nasty and can't be re-used at all
Someone needs to come up with a better way to get rid of it at each hall
I make them share one can each night
Deleteso their weight doesn't rise out of sight.
lol.
And there you go...
a money making invention for you to show.
Just get busy on that please
I'd buy one if it made the chore done with ease
haha I go through one a night myself
DeleteAt my shelf
But think I'll have to get rid of those for a while too
To get this body crap through
Hmmm I'd have to think on that
But sure would make one rich as many have a cat
And it would just be so 'you'
Deleteto get rich because of poo.
hahahaha
hahahahaha oh I'd never let that one go
DeleteGet a big old plaque saying it at my show haha
the cat never stopping
ReplyDeletepffft cause he is a little out of mind
but we still reading him. lol
Surely out of my mind
DeleteBut that just makes me a fun rhyming behind
And using G+ now I see
Pffft to that from me
a lot time I use G+ but. you use too I saw pfffttt
Deleteanyway only last night I can join all th G and thr blog lol
I use it too
DeleteFor people to view
But never gonna make my blog go there
It is just to annoying to wade through that lair
I joined up too, at my joint
Deletebut I have to say, I don't get the point!
Yeah I like the blogger thing
DeleteAs it's easier to find one's link to their blog wing
But now that you signed up
I get an email saying you left a comment without a hiccup haha
To me that felt like quite the fast paced adventure! I enjoyed it!!
ReplyDeleteYeah an adventure was had
DeleteLike many a time at my pad
Phew, I feel like I just read a rhyming 'Gone with the wind' This was an epic of all proportions, no room for any distortions, really has some class from your little rhyming ass ;)
ReplyDeletePerhaps "gone with the cat"
DeleteBy Sir Patt von Hatt
haha class for my ass
DeleteSome might think that crass
And you rhymed on cue
I can always make that come due
Then I'd be a rip off though
And we all know how much I like them at my show
A little different than your usual brain bursting rhymes.
ReplyDeleteFor you have cause my brain to burst many times!
But this time my brain did not explode!
Was quite the opposite, instead to implode!
My brain has collapsed and withered to dust!
All because of the wicked rhymes you bust.
I read this story and then I read it again.
Searching for the meaning, I cannot win!
Were you selling stuff from a backpack?
The answer I lack.
Was it a monster in you pack, coming to life?
I guess I'll never know, me and my dull life!
Yeah went down a different path
DeleteSorry for the brain wrath
Making it go to dust
Blown away in a wind gust
Wasn't my intention
But I can't say I dislike such a mention haha
The meaning lies within the readers view
For that is all I made come due
The monster in the pack though
Fits well with my show haha
Wow, Pat.
ReplyDeleteIs that a cat chasing a rat
Sitting in hat
Right beside the mat....
One can't avoid getting in a rhyming mood after reading what you've written
haha I send out the subliminal notes at my sea
DeleteTo get all rhyming just like me
Loving this today! I'm inspired to sit and do my own rhyming exercises. Has to be good for the brain cells! Thanks for sharing this :)
ReplyDeleteYeah it keeps the brain flowing
DeleteWith all the rhymes that are showing
Another winner, you olde sinner. Edgar Allen Poe would give you an award.
ReplyDeleteFirst to mention my rip off
DeleteAnd award would really be great at my trough
goodness...goodness...goodness..this is epic..ha
ReplyDeleteWow made you say the same thing three times today
DeleteI may once more have to do an epic display
Look at you turning a whole new leaf, Cat!!! I go on a vacation for a few days, and you turn into Shakespeare. ;)
ReplyDeletehaha never used where art thou and such stuff
DeleteThat just leaves the cat in a huff
I like the Poe edge to your style
ReplyDeleteIt shows with rhyme, you are quite guile
Having lingered for a while
As I depart, it's with a smile.
xoRobyn
Thanks for the linger
DeleteAnd not giving me the finger
As the rhymes flows every which way
I surely seem to have sway
This is my first summer comment
ReplyDeleteGuess I have a lot of catching up to do when I finally get the time.
Good to see you still going on your rhyme.
Wow you have been long gone
DeleteFrom most every lawn
Welcome back
And yeah I'll always rhyme away at my shack
In epic tradition
ReplyDeleteyou did rhyme
whose ancient
forms do
flow most
readily
from tongues
and lips
with finest
flair.
But do
we dare
to think
to hope
that burdens
borne with
blood and sweat
lie down like
lambs to be
defeated.
And with
meanings
subtle
I do depart
to practice
another art.
I'm off to work on my new drum solo Cat.
.
Wow as my words creep
DeleteYou surely went pretty deep
Those lambs seem to always get the brunt
Of some stupid stunt
And hope the drumming went well
As you beat the thing to hell
Reading this amazing writing
ReplyDeleteleft me feeling quite enlightened--
never let another utter that you are a "hack"...
Your clever lines kept me a'reading
start to finish, NO retreating;
not a word was self-defeating
Congrats on penning such a clever track! ;-)
Great job with this one Pat. Found myself reading aloud, and going faster and faster with each stanza. Very clever. Enjoyed immensely!!
Glad I could amaze
DeleteThat is always fun as one comes to gaze
Anyone tries to call me a hack
And I'll just give them my rhyming ass and no flack
For they are a nut
And I will never retreat from my hut haha
Clever I can do to
Such fun to hear from you
great rhymes as always...your ability to change style and still be awesome is a true talent
ReplyDeleteMaking the cat's ego rise
DeleteYou are oh so wise haha
What can I say
ReplyDeletethis is a lot of rhyming attack
just to say no to flashbacks
in your quest, did you save the pack?
haha the pack was left behind
DeleteFarthest from my mind
And yeah lots of rhyme
But you expect such a chime
I"m having an Edgar Allen Poe flashback. Well done, cat!
ReplyDeleteSuch a flashback is surely grand
DeleteWith such a comparison in my land
Blimey, this is epic.
ReplyDeleteEpic seems to be the word of the day
DeleteHave to like that at my bay
These were impressive rhymes! It's great to see a different style.
ReplyDeleteYeah I can rhyme a mile
DeleteWhether in normal or some other style
Such fun to swap it up
To give all a little hiccup
Could exhaustion harbor tricks as my mind tumbled bricks? Uh yes. lol Are you excited about the book fair? I've read your kids book (You can thank Elisa.) and it's great! I wanted to congratulate you awhile back but unfortunately, I can only find people if they comment on my blog now. It sucks going blind sometimes. :) Good luck this weekend with your books
ReplyDeleteYeah it surely can play tricks
DeleteNot so much for some hicks
The book fair should be grand
As it gets spread across the land
Oh and that blog comment response I never knew
Hmph guess I was out of the loop, sad but true haha
You have gone down a different path mayhap?? And I am liking it!
ReplyDeleteYeah a little different today
DeleteTo spice things up at my bay
Where's the Raven when you crave him? (I'll come here instead.) I like these internal rhymes! k.
ReplyDeleteYeah the raven is long gone
DeleteJust a flashing thing on my lawn
I like your new header
ReplyDeleteIt's quite the scene.
Palm tree, big cat
green elephant thing.
But, that smiling cat,
wise as a fox.
Surrounded by miles of litter box.
Yeah a big elephant bush
DeleteWith a crack tush
The cat can now go
Where ever he wants at his show
pat....
ReplyDeletei am not going to rhyme here...because what you've penned today, somehow doesn't allow me...its so incredible...probably one of the best of yours i've read until now...it touched me "there"...
pleasure to have stumbled across you in this unfathomable world of world wide net....*soft smile
Wow even made you not rhyme
DeleteThat has to be a crime haha
Incredible you say
Really inflating the ego at my bay haha
I have my moments I suppose when I try
And not just be a crazy rhyming guy haha
Glad you enjoy my place as well
Also glad I found your cell
By the way Patt I like the new look
ReplyDeletelooks better than a book
Glad you like
DeleteTook a while to code hike
First, I love the new decor! Next, I agree with the Poe references. This is a perfect "Raven" parody (Wierd Al Yankovich would be impressed!) Lastly, I think it is absolutely amazing the way you inspire so many people to rhyme! Until next time....:)
ReplyDeletehaha glad I could please Weird Al
DeleteHe would be quite the pal
And yeah many come to rhyme
I guess I just bring about such a chime
OMG
ReplyDeleteI do not see
How the rhymes your fingers flee
But it sure hath please-ed me.
Glad I could please
DeleteAs the rhymes breeze
wow! so many ways to rhyme 'ack'
ReplyDeleteI would been puzzled shortly after 'black'
Love the way you tell a story
always leaves me wanting more-y :)
haha a cheating rhyme
DeleteSuch a crime
Ack can be rhymed a ton
So I had to give ti a run
Have to admit, the new layout sent me into shock, where are the books, and now the blogroll is a scroll, moving up the page in such a modern way- I think I dig the cat's new digs, but as with any change, it takes a minute or two, to adjust your mind in view. Fun write, definitely a different style for you, funny, I was think Poe all along, and then saw that Brian guessed my song, which, made me go back, and I had to think, have I really drank so much the raven's drink, guess writing a thesis on poe, turned my poetry so, but after Brian said so, I had to know, and so, I think, perhaps I could see it too, which is always a backpat when such a talent is compared to you :)
ReplyDeleteMost definitely this is the crown jewel in the rip off theme, although, this isn't a rip off at all, more like tribute here at your stall.
Love the form, perhaps we'll see more, in between the cat's daily deeds, fending off drazin and all the other fleas. Definitely a new tool for the cat to make the other's drool.
Really nicely done.
Yeah I get it now
DeleteTook me a while to clue in to Brian's meow
Never know could be
As it sat in the mind of me
And yeah takes a while to get used to
But once in a while I have to change up my zoo
Such a rip off I had to do
Never know, more may come into view
Indeed a wonderful journey, and enjoy the new look of the place. ~ Rose
ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoy the new look
DeleteAnd yeah went on a journey at my nook
Wanted to let you know I enjoy your rymes. This one is really great as I love the Raven by Poe which you modled this after
ReplyDeleteGlad you enjoyed it
DeleteAnd yeah modeled it a bit
As the rhymes flow
At my show
Pat, awesome :) Great write.
ReplyDeleteGlad you found it grand
DeleteAs I rhymed a ton for this one in my land haha
I really enjoyed the rhythm of this poem - flowed beautifully with your thoughts! Glad to have found your site through VoiceBoks!
ReplyDeleteIt's definitely stunning! :)
ReplyDeleteWhat a poem?
Very creative and imaginative!